Can Someone Please Edit My Essay.?

Question by Catwoman: Can someone please edit my essay.?
Because of my own personal experiences,I am committed to helping others achieve personal growth and development.

I was living with my mom for as long as five years until I had an argument with her about my being pregnant that resulted in my being homeless. I ended up staying at my friends house for a few days at a time or would sleep on the streets too. Being homeless was very hard for me because I was going to have a baby. I ended up going to “Skid Row,” a homeless shelter in downtown Los Angeles. For me, this was the worst that I felt I had spiraled downward. When I first got there, I could not believe that women and children, families, and men were homeless. Just being there was hard for me alone. I was not used to this type of living. There was this social worker there that I will always remember her for what she did for me. She encouraged me to reunited with my family and put aside my differences with my family and go back home. She told me that I would make it passed this situation and survive being homeless. I still thank her to this day for encouraging and motivating me to re-concile with my family. So, when I moved back home, it was still hard for me because I just had my baby. I still did not have a job and a place to live. It wasn’t until three months later that I had found a job as a Youth Counselor in a level 14 group home facility. I had saved enough money to move into my first apartment. The freedom felt great. I had finally had my very own place, was working, and most of all, I had a place to live for my baby. My experience of being homeless made me thankful and grateful of two things: that I had a social worker guiding me in the right direction and that I also had family support that I needed during my most challenging times in my life.
From my own personal experiences, I am committed to helping others achieve personal growth, development, and making positive choices that can improve their quality of life. I can relate to the constant despair and frustration experienced by those who find it challenging to cope with everyday life. I am convinced that increasing one’s own sense of empowerment can make the difference between a future of despondency and one filled with hope.
I am applying to the Master’s in Social Work Program because it is my goal to help others in embracing their inner potential to make a positive life transition. Preparation to achieve my personal goal began while I worked at Harbor View Adolescent Center as a Youth Counselor. My primary work responsibility involved my serving as a positive role model for adolescents ages twelve to eighteen. The adolescents encountered issues such as physical and sexual abuse, abandonment, drug and alcohol abuse, bulimia, depression, and severe behavioral problems. At times, the position was extremely stressful,however, I discovered that I had the ability to connect with the adolescents and develop strong emotional ties. While working with them, I focused on several areas of treatment, including, social skills, vocational skills, and independent living skills. My main ambition was to help them build their self-esteem and improve their sense of security. As a youth counselor, I have gained valuable experience in listening to people and helping them make positive decisions in order to improve the quality of their lives. My career goals targets working with vulnerable and oppressed individuals because I want to ensure that these groups of individuals have access to effective services, resources, and much needed guidance.

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Answer by John T.
indent every chapter. other than that i think ur good. thats what i think. someone might see some mistakes but for me i think its good.

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